#FlashFictionFriday – Vol. 15: WAIT FOR ME

Get to the church on time photo credit: pricelessjoy

Get to the church on time
photo credit: pricelessjoy

It’s week fifteen of the flash fiction challenge by Flash Fiction for Aspiring Artists, check out their blog and join in or read other’s posts and be inspired. Will Elizabeth finally meet the man she’s been waiting ten years to see?

Read mine below and feel free to leave a comment. Enjoy!

WAIT FOR ME (151 words)

I’ll never make it on time.

Elizabeth’s riding boots clicked against the cobblestones, petticoats and a flourish of satin skirts swayed around her. The morning frost nipped at her cheeks, red like rogue.

How ghastly should he think she’s not a lady?

The church laid ahead, empty, the morning sun casting a shadow. This was their meeting place, planned ten years ago. Now a mature age of twenty, she’d left America to meet her childhood friend, Alfred. Would he remember her? Would he even show? They hadn’t spoken since the day her family moved away.

Elizabeth’s chest pressed against the bodice of her corset, her lungs burning from the run. And then she waited. Hours passed, her breath slowed.  He wasn’t coming. The realization tugged at her heart.

Silly girl, what did you expect?

The doors to the great church opened, a man appeared dressed in a black cassock.

“Elizabeth?”

“Alfred?”

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17 Responses to #FlashFictionFriday – Vol. 15: WAIT FOR ME

  1. naturelover says:

    Nice!
    You write it very well in 151 words. I like the ending 🙂

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  2. Creatopath says:

    I thought she’d been stood up but yay, Alfred was there! The first two sentences really introduced Elizabeth well.

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  3. Wow! Great tension build-up and then the twist of a happy ending at the end. Loved it Vanessa!

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  4. Very Austen-esque in such a short story. Enjoyable.

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  5. amaya911 says:

    Congrats! I nominate you for the Sisterhood of the World Bloggers Award! http://lifeofanelpasowoman.com/2015/05/29/the-sisterhood-of-the-world-bloggers-award/

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  6. luckyjc007 says:

    Very neat story! I felt like I was a bystander watching her as she hurried along with excitement and fearing he would not show after so much time had passed. Of course…I love the ending.

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  7. Sonya says:

    It’s very Jane Austen – I love it!

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  8. Ellespeth says:

    This was a great piece,Vanessa. Imagine not forgetting a childhood promise made so long ago:) And, it never hurts to have an priest as a friend.
    Ellespeth

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