#FlashFictionFriday – Vol. 2: 40-LOVE

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Last week was a blast, so many great stories to read that I’ve decided to make this a weekly post. Just be sure to post a link from your blog to #flashfictionfriday to join others who’ll be putting out their snappy fiction today. You’ll see mine in my Twitter feed to the right. If you have any insight to give my flash fiction piece a little more ‘oomph’ or have something rewarding to say, please leave a comment.

Up for a challenge? Join Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers for their weekly prompt and write. Just follow their blog on the link above and follow the directions for next week’s challenge.

40-LOVE (139 words)

 Today was the happiest day of Margaret’s life. Her boyfriend was looking at apartments with her. Two years of patience. Two years of hints.

“Look a tennis court. And we can walk to the ocean,” she said, glimpsing out the window before wrapping her arms around Michael’s waist.

He smiled but it didn’t reach his eyes.

“Or there’s things inside we can do.” Margaret bit her lip and slipped her hand south of his belt.

“Maggie,” he warned.

She pouted. “I want this.”

Michael looked away.

The sound of tennis volleying filled the silence. It matched Margaret’s racing heart. Thump. Thump. Thump.

“I can’t. I got into that graduate program at NYU,” Michael whispered.

“But my residency is here.”

“It’ll only be two years,” he said.

Two more years of waiting. Two more years for love to slip away.

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9 Responses to #FlashFictionFriday – Vol. 2: 40-LOVE

  1. “He smiled but it didn’t reach his eyes.” Great sentence and perfectly placed. At this point I sensed a mood change in the scene. The story kept me involved and interested. Wonderful story (but sad ending). Thank you for participating and I really hope you will continue. 🙂

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  2. Cat says:

    Lovely story and well written

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  3. Great story…the conversations bring it to life and that phrase, smile did not reach his eyes. Awesome!!

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  4. milliethom says:

    There’s a certain sadness at the end of this story: the possibility – perhaps inevitability – of love slipping away. You built the conflict of interests up nicely, to leave us wondering what the outcome will be. Some well chosen phrases bring the scene to life. Well done. 🙂

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  5. kirsten says:

    Wonderful job with the prompt! I could feel her disbelief and hurt as he spoke those dreaded words. Two more years seems like a lifetime when you are young.

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  6. Sonya says:

    Really like how you brought back the repetition of “two years” at the end, but this time, it’s despair, not hope. You handled that turn of Maggie’s mood well. You used dialogue effectively to move the story on. Good job 🙂

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  7. Great build of conflict (internal and external). I kept making this face:

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